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Sunday Six ~ Cherry Tune-Up

August 14, 2011
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Here are the first six sentences of our erotic free read Cherry Tune-Up: 

Bobbi Jo Martin hung back in the shadows under the Highway Thirty-Seven Racetrack stands. Acrid smoke, fumes and dust from a long night of racing swirled in the hazy light but couldn’t entirely block her view of her childhood best friend. There he was, Jack Day, strutting toward a red pickup with a buxom brunette clinging on each arm. She cringed—they must be the spoils that went to the winner of the feature race.

Deflated, Bobbi Jo shuffled toward her rental car. She’d had no contact with Jack for nearly ten years, but she just knew he’d help her with her current problem.

You can read more about Cherry Tune-Up HERE, and you can read the entire book free at Literotica.com. Here’s a LINK to Chapter One, enjoy!

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38 Comments leave one →
  1. August 14, 2011 5:14 am

    Right I’m off to read Cherry Tune-Up! Fantastic intro, looking forward to the whole story. Thank you.

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 10:42 am

      OOoo, thanks, Alix – can’t wait to hear how you like it!

  2. August 14, 2011 9:27 am

    Bobbi Jo sounds like she needs someone like Jack to rev her engine. Great intro!

  3. August 14, 2011 10:31 am

    Wow! I want to read that! Published on Literotica? Why isn’t it published at Smashwords or something, girlfriend?

    I love reunion (and rescue) stories! Great six. I could smell the fumes–and feel her pain. Excellent job!

    Kally

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 10:46 am

      OOoo thanks, Kally!

      We wanted to get something out there as a free read & someone recommended Literotica, so off we went – we’ve had great numbers over there and some fun feedback. Have to check out Smashwords – tell me why you like it!

  4. August 14, 2011 10:47 am

    Wonderful hook! Well written. I want more so you did your job. Great first SSS. I love Bobbi Jo’s voice.

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 10:59 am

      Thanks! Sometimes I think the first few lines are the hardest – how to set the hook and get the info we want out there, without dumping too much in. Glad it worked!

  5. August 14, 2011 10:48 am

    sounds fun. do you publish on Literotica a lot? I have read some there…
    nice work
    Liz

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 11:00 am

      Thanks, Liz. That’s our only one at Literotica so far – they mostly have short stories, and we tend to write novellas or full length. We serialized this one into chapters, seemed to work okay.

  6. August 14, 2011 11:14 am

    Good six. Poor guy is going to loose his twin blonds.

  7. August 14, 2011 11:17 am

    awesome – love it

  8. August 14, 2011 12:03 pm

    Of course, now I have to read the entire thing. Great six and thanks for sharing more. 🙂

  9. August 14, 2011 12:43 pm

    Now, I want to read it all…sheesh! Entice me why don’t you 🙂 Groovy six!

  10. adrianakraft permalink*
    August 14, 2011 1:02 pm

    Thanks, all – enticement is what it’s all about!

  11. August 14, 2011 1:42 pm

    You have captured a scene full of country mystic. I wonder how she’s going to capture him.

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 3:17 pm

      actually, it’s a huge question who will capture whom!

  12. August 14, 2011 1:45 pm

    Great description. Great conflict. Hooked by this.l

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 3:19 pm

      OOoo every time i see the word “hooked” I do a happy dance! Yay!

  13. August 14, 2011 1:55 pm

    Loved it!

  14. August 14, 2011 1:59 pm

    I love characters with a history. Good six.

  15. August 14, 2011 2:17 pm

    A really great six! Some really good emotion. xx

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 3:21 pm

      Thanks – I’m not sure who’s going to tug at whose heartstrings harder, actually!

  16. August 14, 2011 2:44 pm

    Awww. Don’t give up already!

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 3:20 pm

      Bobbi Jo’s too spunky to ever give up!

  17. August 14, 2011 2:48 pm

    She needs someone to get her engine racing!

  18. August 14, 2011 3:38 pm

    Great description, loved it!

  19. August 14, 2011 4:07 pm

    Great six – you’ve really set the scene. I hope Jack notices her and helps!

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 4:38 pm

      Oh, I think he’ll notice, all right! But help? That’ll come on his own terms…

  20. August 14, 2011 7:08 pm

    Poor thing…feeling so deflated – love the emotion you display- great 6

    • adrianakraft permalink*
      August 14, 2011 7:43 pm

      Thanks so much Dawne – turns out, she’ll be facing some of the biggest decisions of her life, the emotional roller coaster’s only just begun!

  21. Jennifer Lowery~Writer permalink
    August 14, 2011 7:59 pm

    Great conflict! Can’t wait to find out what she needs to tell him!

  22. August 14, 2011 9:57 pm

    Great potential here, especially as an opening hook. Well done!

  23. August 14, 2011 10:08 pm

    Good beginning. Lots of questions raised here. Very nice.

  24. August 15, 2011 5:12 am

    Love how he’s strutting off with 2 brunettes! I could definitely feel her hesitation to approach. Wonder how she’s going to get to him to get the help she needs!

  25. adrianakraft permalink*
    August 15, 2011 10:03 am

    Thanks everyone for the terrific comments – exactly what authors love to hear from readers!

  26. August 15, 2011 1:04 pm

    Wow, excellent six. Well done 🙂

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